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30 in 30, day 2: shock 
3 May 2017 00:41 - 30 in 30, day 2: shock
rosefox: In 1813, a lending library clerk discusses books with a customer. (valour advances)
These one-sentence stories are almost impossible to do with dialogue, which makes me realize how dialogue-focused my stories are! Fortunately the nature of Regency English allows me to abuse sentence-lengthening punctuation with impunity.

overwhelmed anticipation exhaustion humiliation optimistic surprised
confused sympathy anger sad energetic hyper
pleased thankful mischievous bliss tired broken
calm lonely defeated cold love hope
shock relief tears laughter thrilled remorse


2: Shock.

Afterwards, Nathaniel had little memory of the event—he could not recall the sting of the shard of glass slicing through his worn boot-sole and into his foot, nor how Smythe managed to determine where he lived and bring him there, nor what, if anything, was said to Mrs. and Miss Waters to alleviate what must have been great concern when the two men stumbled through the door, trailing blood in their wake—but one moment stood out clearly: Smythe draping the counterpane over his shoulders and chafing his chilled hands, saying something inaudible through the roaring in his ears, as his gaze was caught and held by the incongruously merry dance of dust motes in a beam of golden afternoon light.
 
3 May 2017 07:27
miss_s_b: (Default)
yeah, I've been discovering the difficulty of dialogue too
3 May 2017 07:33
rosefox: Green books on library shelves. (Default)
I mean, it's not unheard of for my characters to speak in run-on sentences, but it's not what I would call a story.
3 May 2017 07:49
miss_s_b: (Self: Innocent)
http://dwfiction.dreamwidth.org/207094.html

The Semi-colon is my new best friend ;)
3 May 2017 07:51
rosefox: A "plant" of connected dots sprouting from a pot. (creativity)
Don't forget parentheses and em dashes!
3 May 2017 07:56
miss_s_b: (Default)
and ellipsis!
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